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  1. Gabaii on Chapter 1 Fri 18 May 2018 11:17PM UTC

    I'VE BEEN BLESSED BY THE MAKER AND HIS BRIDE
    I already love this fic. The implications of a doc in Thedas are interesting as fuck. AND BERTA HAS TRAINING lol
    I don't know If you are a doctor yourself But it's clear thar you did an intensive research for writing this. The details are great and will show how much Berta knows the shit she is doing Lol
    But I want tô ask you two things: one is, If it is possible, tô put some medical clarifications in the notes. I got a bit lost at the terms :/
    The second thing is If you could shorter the paragraphs for the same reason (me getting lost while reading in mobile). I hope I'm not bothering :X
    Ready for more. Next>>

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    1. Convenient_Coma on Chapter 1 Sat 19 May 2018 04:48PM UTC

      Thanks for reading! While I could put medical clarifications in the notes, I think you'll find that I've chosen Berta's medical verbiage to be only demonstrative of the fact that she has medical knowledge and the actually meaning of the word can be gleaned from the context or is not terribly important (my non-medical beta reader husband is my test case). I'd rather not spend a bunch on time on notes, not knowing which parts are confusing to the audience at large. If you have a particular question, please ask. All comments are read and replied to as needed. Having said that, Dr. Google is a fount of knowledge.

      As to the paragraphs, my paragraphs are as long as they need to be for the idea they're communicating. To shorten a paragraph, I'd have to just say less and that doesn't really jive with my way of writing. Did you mean something else? If it's a formatting fix, I'm happy to try to oblige.

      Thanks for the feedback. Happy reading! Chapter 10 is in the works...

      Last Edited Fri 31 May 2019 10:28AM UTC

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