This is so intensely delightful, every sentence just pops with personality and perfectly placed little details. And Hux is so hot here! "his Adam’s apple traveling a long, distinguished path up a perfectly smooth column of pale skin." -- had me DYING.
"This was the story of her life. No one wanted to chat up Rose for Rose’s sake. " so extremely in character and well-observed and lovely, like the rest of this entire first chapter
Rose's lil science camp necklace was perfect, I really adore that detail. And Hux clearly stumbling over whether to give her the hundo, then getting mad, and how she susses out his General-ness from the first interaction: I'm just so impressed at how you got so much canon-type detail and these lovely character bits. I'm so excited to read the rest. Thank you for writing and posting!
I'm back to yell again: the way he looks up at the sky right after they meet! His pupil widening after he realizes she basically paid for his drink! And THIS: "She was, she realized, in point of fact, in actual danger. And not from any would-be robbers, but from Cranky Pants' good girl face and ready wit."
so so so so so good and he's so hot and you gave him and Irish accent in this bc you're the best.
AAAHHH this comment made my LIFE! 😍😍😍 Thank you for just EVERYTHING you said here, it really made me flop around like an overly excited puppy. TMI maybe, but true. Thank you!!
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