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  1. MiserablePileOfSecrets on Chapter 2 Sun 06 Apr 2025 06:43PM UTC

    Weeee new chapter of the boys!! Im already so excited!!! Though im sure you know that XD

    I gotta say, you write combat and action scenes very well! They're nicely coordinated, easy to read and visualize, even with so much going on. Heh and I like the choices of Autobots getting into Structie fights, from Sideswipe getting kicked, to the mini bot entourage fighting Scavenger to Sunstreaker's unbridled fury on Scrapper... Someone's *really* angry...

    But not as angry as Blades!!! My boy Blades!!! Yippee!! And I'll admit that the whole interaction of Blades hoisting Hook up, the banter and Hook's shriek painted such a fun mental image that left me giggling despite the otherwise bad situation Hook was in.

    And hehe the reference to Scrapper's fucking levitation wing hahhahhh

    But gosh, wow, the whole fight between Blades and Hook. Blades' relentless fury, the nigh savagery and aggressiveness in which he attacked Hook and Hook, more than anything just reacting and defending himself rather than really being able to go on the offensive. Gosh, how brutal Blades was! Fueled by his brother being captured and taking his anger and putting blame on Hook!

    Gosh, you wrote Blades so damn well!!! I love him so much!!

    And heh, afterwards with Bonecrusher being the one to patch up Hook first. Ahh I love their brotherly banter... And gosh, the concern the Structies share for Hook. Scrapper arguing with Megatron, Bonecrusher supporting Hook... Even arguing about letting First Aid repair him..

    And gosh!!! I love Scrapper and Hook's friendship!! Its so adorable that even in so much pain Hook was more concerned about whether or not his brother had applied his nanite gel.

    Then Aid gets to heal Hook and then take over running the medical bay for a bit. While I'm sure that's annoying for Hook, it also gives him the perfect chance to observe Aid's skills and habits too...

    Him comforting Wildrider is so cute... it made me squeal happily. He's just a kid, he really needs those comforting hugs.. Sweet baby boy... And hehhehe Aid getting a bit stern and breaking up fights with his Disappointment:tm:

    Ahhh and then Hook and First Aid get another nice moment to themselves to talk and debate their different ways of thinking. I love seeing them interact, I'm sure you know that too. But gosh, I love them so much, even when they're not getting along just yet and Aid's both trying his best to help but also stand his ground.

    Aid's trying!! He's really trying to ensure the least amount of people get hurt. And I know he must be upset seeing the damage his own brothers are doing to the Structies, on his behalf no less...

    Heheh aw yeah Beach Groove Scavenger interaction yippee. They should hang out.

    Overall, great, amazing chapter, I love the development of events. I love how you write everyone, I hope Aid can finally talk to his team and tell his brothers to chill and stop mauling the ones he has to fix and is around all the time.

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    1. wwheeljack on Chapter 2 Thu 10 Apr 2025 03:33AM UTC

      Brain was tired, and I didn't respond, but you know I love your comments whenever you post them!

      I'm glad you liked the combat, it's always me going "is this easy to understand" and thinking it's not. Describing stuff can be so hard.

      Also glad you enjoyed violent/angry Blades. He's very fun to write as a full blown antagonist. I adore him a lot, but writing him as to be seen as a threat to the main POV character is fun.

      I need to give each Structie a bit of time with Hook and Bonecrusher being gruff and worried for Hook calls to me. I love fairly emotionless men showing emotions for their family.

      And yes, lol, Hook was very annoyed having First Aid be NICE to people. He's so ANNOYING. Stupid Protectobot.

      Wildrider needs hugs... I imagine a First Aid disappointment stare would make even the grumpiest of Cons back down. He needs to be strong and show his different methods of dealing with people, and even he knows niceness and sweetness doesn't always work.

      Thank you as always for commenting, it always makes me smile.

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